- It has been four days and the strawberry is now thrown out it was nasty. I think not washing it was a very dumb idea. I really only did it because I had to, I regret it.
- I got to four days into my fruit before it died. It got so bad I do not think a raccoon could or would eat it. I think that when the color changed I knew I had to throw it out. It turned a gross color that would cause anybody to hurl. I think this assignment showed how much I did not like describing things via present thought and quick thinking.
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I like how the juxtaposition between the observations on your fruit and the reflections on yourself. It is a nice contrast that reflects your thoughts and helps the reader understand your perspective.
I thank you for your nice comment and big words
I enjoyed the simplicity of the writing and how it conveyed that you wrote as you went, letting your true emotions shine through. The pacing was nice and I liked how the two entries connected. I also really like the vibrant imagery.
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Rory, you might not like it, but you’re right good at it. Your personality comes out in your description, so maybe you’re getting better at subjective description? I like the picture your writing gives me of a raccoon turning up their nose at the not dear but at least departed strawberry.