Entry 1:
This kiwi is hairy. It’s strange to me that a fruit would have hair. Does it need to stay warm? I think they’re grown in warm places though. I wonder what it looks like when it’s shaved. A bald kiwi. Maybe I’ll shave this one. If I can that is. It has green skin under the hair. Will it change color with age like a banana and many other fruits? It has two closed holes on each side with flaps. What a strange fruit.
Entry 2:
My kiwi feels softer than it did in the first entry. I can squish it easier than before. I feel as though if the kiwi had emotions it would feel very lethargic right now. Its growing older and will soon reach its end. I don’t plan on eating it or cutting it open, so it will likely just sit here till it’s too squishy to hold its shape.
I liked how in the first entry you asked questions about the fruit, doing so really had the reader thinking about it and had them drawn in right from the start. I also enjoyed how u tied the first entry into the second one, good job!
Thankyou!
I like the introduction. You start with describing what it feels like and then work your further opinion into the paragraph. Starting the second paragraph you start with the change like the start of the first one. Your tone for this project was light hearted and very well done.
Thankyou!
I didn’t know kiwi had holes with flaps on opposite sides. I like your specificity, particularly when I learn things. We readers also learn about you because of your objective description — what you would do with the kiwi (shave it) and what you surmise its personality would be (lethargic).
Thankyou!