She took one more look around to make sure she got everything. Once she did so, she headed to the moving truck and hopped in as they slowly crept away from their sold house. After she woke up from her two hour nap, she felt refreshed, but panicked when she felt her neck. “Where is my necklace?” She exclaimed. “Well I thought you brought it with you” her dad says. “I did but where did it go?” she shouted. Her dad assured her that it would be ok, but she couldn’t focus as she felt she wanted to cry.
If you liked the story, make sure to comment!! And maybe share if you have had an experience like this. Hope you tune in next week to hear another 100 word story. Great to have you all here, and have wonderful wonderful week!!
Hi Marissa,
I definitely liked your story, especially how you dropped us into the middle of a scene. I think that’s my favorite thing about these challenges. You have to consider the importance of every word. Each sentence must move the story forward, but it also has to pull us in. I’ve lost special items in pools, ocean, and in moves across states. I can relate to this! 🙂
Keep on writing!
Mrs. Rombach
This story gave me some extreme déjà vu! A long time ago when I moved houses I somehow lost a ring that I ALWAYS kept on. I never ended up finding that ring )-: I really liked the words you used with your dialogue because I could really picture a young girl having this exact conversation with her father while I was reading this. For your sake, I hope this isn’t based on a true story!
Kaylee Georgis, your student teacher from Longwood University