When I was out on my deckĀ watching the sunset, I saw a brown balloon float over into my backyard. I was curious about the color of the balloon because never in a million years had I seen a brown-colored balloon. I went to go get it and saw a note attached to it. As I opened the note, I saw it was written in a different language. I went inside and opened up my chrome book. I took a picture of the note and got it translated. What it said left me frightened.
~Liz
Liz,
You changed this up a little from your draft, and I think your ending is even better! Now you’ve created a mysterious feeling and left the reader wondering what will happen next. Also, you crafted your own artwork to accompany your story. I love that initiative and creativity.
I’m looking forward to your next 100WC post-
Mrs. Rombach