By: Keira Nguyen
Her eyes flutered open
Hands reaching over to turn off the alarm
She sits up in her bed yawning
Her legs swing over
Landing on the rough, white carpet
She walks over to the closet
Changing her outfit
Then walking out the door to her car
The car door slams shut behind her
As she drives off towards the beach,
Speeding by the millions of stores and buildings
When she arrives at her destination
Her tires screech under her,
Scraping against the cold, hard gravel
She gets out of the car
Walking slowly towards the beach
Feeling the warm sand on her feet
She sets her belongings down
Running towards the ocean
Soon jumping in as if it was drawing her in
Tasting the salty, cold water around her
Hours later she gets out,
The rough sand against her feet once again
Picking up her belongings,
Then walking towards her car
The drive home wasn’t long enough
As she entered the door
The stench of alcohol reaching her nose
Screams rang throughout the house
Until it became dead silent
I really like the ending and how the mood changes.
I like that you had a story to your poem and that the ending subverted expectations and added a darker twist.
i really love the plot twist in your poem. Good job!