By: Logan Boddie

Tall standing trees dancing in the breeze

The sun peaking through its bright green leaves making shadow puppets on the grass

Joyful solitude

Waking up naturally to birds singing at your window

With the energy to start the new day

Reading a book without distractions and the ability to become part of it

Sleeping in tranquility

Peace calms the weak-hearted like a mother

Peace is like an eternal hug

Peace is a sunset beach on a clear day

With no one else but you

1. I published an emotion poem.
2. I chose this emotion because I think that people overlook it because they’re so busy pursuing something else and don’t realise how powerful it can be.
3. The tone of my poem is peaceful.
4. The theme of my poem is that peace is all around us, we just need to stop to enjoy it.
5. One example of figurative language in my poem is “Tall standing trees dancing in the breeze” which is a personification. I chose this line of figurative language because when it it really nice outside, kinda hot with a cool breeze, the trees sway in a relaxing motion and relaxation is related to peace. Another example of figurative language from my poem is “peace calms the weak-hearted like a mother” which is a simile. I chose this figurative language because when someone suddenly feels peaceful, one could describe it as a wave that washes over them. I would describe the way a mother makes you feel as a wave of peace, also.
6. The first revision I made was that I added the line “the sun peaking through its bright green leave ps making shadow puppets on the grass” to add more detail. The second revision I made was that I changed “trees rustling in the breeze” to “trees dancing in the breeze” to add a personification.
7. It was easy to write this poem because peace is so abundant that it isn’t hard to understand what it feels like which is why it was easy to make others understand what peace feels like.
8. I am very satisfied with the final draft of this poem because I think that I have conveyed successfully what peace is to the reader with the help of figurative language which is a win in my book.

By: Kaitlinh Nguyen

Every Friday you lure me,

Like a candy to a child.

You bring my bitter mood

Up like Christmas morning.

Programmed like a computer,

My automatic fingers dial and call the pizza bakery.

Tik tok,

Tik tok,

I watch the clock,

Waiting for my treasure.

The door rings.

Familiar smells invade my home,

And you arrive.

I guard you like a soldier,

Incase an intruder tries to steal.

My prized possession.

Like a missing piece of a puzzle

I take a slice of you,

Scrumptious,

Soft,

Succulent,

Pizza.

Yummy bits of cheese and bread

Invade my taste buds

And I welcome you with open arms.

Distracted by the tv,

I reach for another slice of you,

But unlike my stomach,

The box is empty.

Like a child finished with their candy,

I still craved more of you.

1. I published an ode poem.
2. I chose to write about pizza because in my family we frequently order pizza and pizza is one of my favorite foods.
3.  The tone of my poem is, appreciative.
4. The theme of my poem is that pizza is enjoyable and appetizing.
5. “Every Friday you lure me, like a candy to a child.”, this figurative language is a simile, and it helps the reader relate to how a child fells about candy. This shows how the pizza is appetizing. “Like a child finished with their candy, I still craved more of you.”, this is another example of a simile, and it helps the reader understand how enjoyable the pizza was.
6. I changed the word good to scrumptious, because it was a more descriptive word. I also added another simile to the end of my poem. I added ” Like a child finished with their candy, I still craved more of you.”
7. This poem was not difficult to write because there are a lot of senses associated with pizza. It was easy to describe the smell and taste.
8. I am satisfied with my final draft, I revised and edited it, and got a peer reviewer to go over my final draft.

I glance over the rows of seats

And below the glaring lights

Is a restless crowd.

As my hands fly back

And forth across the keys while the others frantically

Bow back and forth,

The minute movements of shuffling feet

And squeaking strings

And ruffling sheet music,

Are all under the watchful eye

Of the conductor.

In the midst of the melodies,

A stumble occurs.

The crowd doesn’t notice

But the perceptive ears of the musicians

Catch all falters.

Yet still we push forward.

As the show comes to its close,

And the players slow to a stop,

Rising out of the looming silence

Like a phoenix from the ashes,

Is a thunderous applause.

1. I published a sensory detail poem.

      2b. It was full of many vivid details that I could describe with a chronological order.

3. The tone of my poem is nervous.                                                                         
4. Theme of my poem is that even though people make mistakes, if you take them in stride, you can turn them into something wonderful.
5. “Rising out of the looming silence, like a phoenix from the ashes, is a thunderous applause” is a simile which i used to contribute to the change in tone towards the end from nervousness to triumph.

          “others frantically Bow back and forth” is an example of imagery. The figurative language contribute to the development of nervousness by expressing it in the musicians.

6. Revision #1: I changed the “roaring applause” to “thunderous applause” to help communicate the magnitude and extremity of the sound.

          Revision #2: I added “in the midst of the melodies” to add both alliteration and to help transition from one point in the story to another.

7. It was easy for me to write this poem because i have both a big vocabulary and remember a lot of the details of that concert.
8. I’m pretty happy with the final draft because it tells a story with multiple parts, has lots of sensory detail, and fulfills the requirements for my type of poem.

by Max Muldoon

My Hopes

I hope for a day when all have food

I hope for a day when everyone greets each other with an affable mood

I hope for a day when birds always sing

I hope for a day when a husband and wife are united for eternity by a golden ring

I hope for a day when friends are always true

To friends oldest and ever so new

I hope for a day when the country is one

Like a synchronized orchestra that plays to the beat of a drum

I hope for a day when everyone’s the same

Like a photograph of honeycomb encompassed in a frame

I hope that no one will ever shy away

To the challenges they face with their friends day by day

Poem Reflection

1. I published an inspired by poem.
2. My source of inspiration for this poem was my hopes for a better future.
3. My desired tone for my poem was a hopeful tone.
4. The theme to my poem is that unity and love is the foundation to a successful future.
5. Two examples of figurative language used in my poem are,”I hope for a day when the country is one, like a synchronized orchestra that plays to the beat of a drum”(simile) and,” A husband and wife united for eternity by a golden ring.”(hyperbole)  Both of these quotes from my poem contribute to the overall theme of unity and love because they describe working together in unison.  These quotes also support the overall hopeful tone because unifying the country will bring about peace and love and so will being married for eternity represent how, as a couple, you are one, committed and hopeful for your future, which is what my poem is about.
6. One example of a revision I made was to add my last two lines of the poem, “I hope that no one will ever shy away, to the challenges they face with their friends day by day,” to  reinforce the theme of love and unity. Another example of a revision I made was that I took out,”And no one will ever be the source of blame” and replaced it with,” Like a photograph of honeycomb encompassed in a frame.”  I did this to add figurative language and draw likeness between a honeycomb and comparing the same views and likeness in the world.
7. It was fairly easy for me to write this poem because I was inspired by my own hopes and dreams.  All I had to do was think about my own optimisms and changes I wished to see for the future and write about them in a poem.
8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because I exceeded all expectations listed in the rubric. I think it has good flow and I even was able to make it rhyme!

By: Jason Taylor

Seeing the towering mountain of steel and hard labor

We walked the year long que to the ride

My stomach tightening as we came closer to the front of the line

The cart finally came a stop

The sweat collected on the handle from the previous riders

Sitting in those semi-warm seats from previous roller coaster goers

Listening to the bright red handles clicking in place

The countdown clock slowly ticking down

The faces of my terrified friends all around me

The concerned voices of my friends exclaiming that we made a mistake

The whistle of the wind in my ears as we approached the climax of the hill

The sudden temperature change at the top of the hill

As we fell at rapid speeds straight for the lake

Screams coming from all around

At the end the rush I felt

Exclaiming to go again and again

Reflection questions

1. I decided to publish a sensory detail poem.
2. b. I chose this event as the basis for my poem because it happened recently and I remember it vividly.
3. The tone of my poem is anxious.
4. The theme of my poem is don’t be afraid to face your fears.
5. One example of  figurative language in my poem is “towering mountain of steel and hard labor” The type of figurative language  is metaphor. This figurative language contributes to the tone and theme development because it refers to the roller coaster as a mountain which gives an anxious feel. Another example of figurative language in my poem is “Walked the year long Que.” The type of figurative language is metaphor. This figurative language contributes to the tone and theme development because it tells the reader that I am not looking forward to the ride because it is referred to as taking a year long.
6.  One way I revised my poem is I changed fast to rapid. I made this change because fast is a pretty basic word so I used better vocabulary.  Another way I revised my poem is I changed large hill to towering mountain. I made this revision because it better adds to the tone of the poem.
7. It was pretty easy to write this poem, because it happened recently and I knew what I was going to write before I started.
8. I am very satisfied with my draft, since this was my best poem I wrote and I feel like I captured the tone well.

By: Eric Stoesser

It all started off as a sunny and partly cloudy day,
Beautiful,
Friends and families having a fabulous day in Boston,
Before the annual marathon.
Then, Boom and a few seconds later Boom.
People start yelling and everyone goes crazy.
Then you hear sirens,
Bee doo bee doo.
Later on the news.
“Two people are the culprits,
For this horrifying incident in Boston.”
Then, that night the news says that three people died,
And many many more are hurt.

The peom I published was an inspired by poem.

The source of inspiration for my poem was terrorism. I was inspired by terrorism because it is a big problem nowadays.

The tone of my poem is saddening.

The theme of my poem is violence doesn’t solve anything.

“Bee doo bee doo,” is an example of onomatopoeia. This figurative language helps contribute to the poem by enhancing the sound of the police and all the medical personnel.

“Boom,” is an example of onomatopoeia. This figurative language helps the reader understand how big the explosion was.

My first revision was putting in the word horrifying instead of scary. I did this to deepen the meaning.

My second revision was putting in beautiful instead of good. I did this to to show how nice of a day it was before the incident.

The poem was easy for me to write because terrorism is a big deal in our time right now and I also don’t like terrorism.

I am very satisfied by my work because I did the best I could do.

Written by: Jacob Vail

He’s never gonna give you up

Never gonna let you down

Never gonna run around and desert you

Never gonna make you cry

Never gonna say goodbye

Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

Never gonna give

Never gonna give

Give you up

Bright blond hair

Dancing around

He is no stranger to love

And he knows not of hate

He is Rick

And he rightfully should be…

President

1. I published an inspired by poem.

2. The source of my inspiration was Rick Astley’s song titled “Never Gonna Give You Up,” and I chose it because I enjoy the song and it already contains a large amount of hyperboles.

3. The tone of my poem is proud.

4. The theme of my poem is ‘Rick Astley Should Be President.’

5A. ‘Never gonna let you down’ is an example of a hyperbole, as the word never is an absolute and total word. It influences the tone and theme by providing a quote from the song, as well as being a positive sentence.

5B. ‘Bright blond hair’ is an example of imagery and alliteration, which influences the tone and theme by using a word with a positive connotation.

6A. I changed ‘will’ to ‘should’ in line 15, because it made more sense as Rick Astley becoming president wasn’t a definite thing.

6B. I changed ‘moving’ to ‘dancing in line 11, because in the music video that I took inspiration from, they were dancing, not just moving.

7. It was much more easy to write this poem than the other poems, as I could use words from the song to express my point more clearly, instead of having to come up with all of my own words.

8. I am very satisfied with my final draft, as I don’t see any words that could be improved much farther, and my point gets across very clearly.

by Molly Kaplan

You stand like a trophy,

gleaming in the soft light from the kitchen window.

Your plain exterior nothing compared to what you hold inside.

Two doors, only two doors stand before me

and your delicious contents.

I then open the door, and am greeted with a blinding flash of white light.

My eyes barley see anything but the blurred, illuminated outlines of food.

Like small edible jewels, waiting to be consumed.

If this were heaven, I would gladly go.

My eyes finally adjust to the light, and I behold the most breathtaking sight;

drawers of food line the inside of you, completed filled.

It seemed to beckon me to take something.

This was too good to be real,

it could only have been a dream.

Two Dimensions

By: Shivani Rajagopal

It is like a mirror reflecting everything, both light and dark,

It is like a gold chalice with elaborate designs filled with poison,

Shading in a piece of art, a mix of neutral colors,

The feeling is a game of tug of war, back and forth you go,

Like clear blue skies, dominated by black clouds within seconds,

It is like every color is tinted with the slightest bit of gray,

It is a beautiful exotic environment invaded by roaring factories spitting out big puffs of harmful smoke,

It is the one missing piece from the puzzle,

A thin, hairline fracture in a vase,

Missing the correct key for a lock,

The glowing, sparkling stars floating in the unknown dark matter,

Biting into candy coated in sugar only to find a salty, sour substance underneath,

It scratches the smooth white surface, leaving behind rips and holes,

Eating at the flesh of an animal like a parasite,

Bittersweetness stabs you in the back like a once close friend

1. I  decided to publish an emotion poem.
2. I chose the emotion of bittersweetness, because it is a feeling that is always present. It shows nothing is completely perfect.
3. The tone of my poem is melancholy or pessimism.
4. The theme of my poem is that  small imperfections can degrade the big picture.
5. “It is like a gold chalice with elaborate designs filled with poison,” this line from the poem is a simile. It describes how the object can be beautiful and elegant, but the poison diminishes its value. This adds to the pessimistic tone, because it focuses in on the negativity(poison). “It scratches the smooth white surface, leaving behind rips and holes,” this second piece of figurative language from the poem is an example of personification. This emotion cannot literally scratch a smooth white surface. It shows that this feeling targets the errors in an object to make you view that object differently. This brings out the gloomy melancholy tone, again bringing focus to all the errors in the white surface.
6. A revision I made was substituting the phrase “A small crack” with ” A thin hairline fracture.” I made this change because “A thin hairline fracture” emphasizes the crack and it paints a detailed picture of the vase in the reader’s mind. “A small crack” is a simple phrase with not much meaning. My second revision was replacing “biting into hard candy” with “biting into candy coated in sugar only to find a salty, sour substance underneath”. This revision is detailed, specific and activates senses like taste and sight.
7. The poem wasn’t easy, but it also wasn’t difficult. It did not require an overwhelming amount of focus or thinking. In my first draft thinking of figurative language and finding the connection between inanimate objects and a specific emotion was different and somewhat challenging. After planning and using techniques like webs and organizers, it became easier to write the poem.
8. I’m pretty satisfied with my poem. I feel like if I picked a different type of poem that could be linked to a specific moment or event my poem would be better, but I feel like I did well.

By: Matthew Kerolos

Chocolate Chip Cookies,

Oh how you make my mouth sing,

Crunch, Crunch, Crunch.

You are one who brings joy,

Comfort, and love to all.

You give shelter to those in need,

You nothing more than delicious.

You are a firework,

One that goes off in my mouth,

You are a valiant warrior,

One that sacrifices,

One that fights,

And one who cares.

The fascinating artwork you create always seems to amaze me,

Oh how your chocolate chips always tease me,

You are most definitely a home,

To those who need,

And to those who need love,

You love,

You care,

You amaze

And we glorify and dearly thank you.

Reflection:

The poem I published is an Ode. I wrote an ode to Chocolate Chip Cookies. My tone of my poem is joyful. The theme of my poem is Chocolate Chip Cookies bring happiness and comfort to all.

Figurative language: “You are a firework”- Metaphor. This example of figurative language develops to the tone and theme development by making the tone more exiting and happy because fireworks are joyful.

”You give shelter to those in need”-Personification.

I used personification because this sentence makes me visualize that chocolate chip cookies are comforting.

Revison 1:  “The (Amazing to Fascinating) artwork you create always seems to amaze me”. – I made this revision because the word is more sophisticated and helps me want to visualize more about how the cookie is entertaining and beautiful.

Revision 2:”You are a (Brave to Valiant) warrior”. -I made this revision because valiant has more in depth visualization and meaning to it, and I also chose this to go in depth about how this cookie goes into extreme measures to bring joy to others.

It was very easy to create this poem because there is so much to praise Chocolate Cookies for because of their delicious taste and appearance.

I am satisfied with my final draft becuase it has a lot of figurative language and good word choice.