By:Adam Jeong

I walk,

I walk into your towering trees

like the blades of grass

to a bumblebee

I see,

I see your deers staring at me,

they are quiet like a sleeping mouse.

I hear,

I hear the chirping of your cricket they like

Your own personal warriors

In the night,

your moonlight fills me with delight.

Your flowers smile at me

like a ray of hope.

your shade engulfs me as if it were my predator.
it traps me in a metal box.

I cannot escape,

I can only lay quiet

in peace and neutrality

As if I were the

Embodiment of tranquility.

1. The type of poem I chose to write was an ode.
2. I chose the subject nature because I love the wilderness.
3. The tone of my poem was peaceful.
4. The theme of my poem was nature is beautiful

By: Emily Taylor

Cold, crisp, and chilly water meet my toes

Salty air like crunchy pretzels

Little crabs finding their home

Seaguls soaring like planes attempting to steal your food

Sand falling through my toes

Dolphins I see, the dogs of ocean

White noise and laughter

Sand sticking to everyone like glue

Who knew!

Sunglasses on my face

While someone opens the beverage case

Sunscreen on faces looking like Casper

Well, it was kind of a disaster!

Sunlight falling down like a waterfall

But thankfully my hat saves me like a hero

The ocean looking so peaceful, yet so violent

Waves crashing like thunder

Music in my ear, like the only sight I see

Wow!

I’m so thankful I’m here with my family

Reflection

1.) I published an Ode.

2.) I chose the beach as my subject fr my ode because I love the beach and because there are so many different ways to describe the beach.

3.) The tone of my poem is Joyful.

4.) The theme of my poem is there is no place like the beach.

5.)

a. “Sunlight falling like a waterfall”

This is a simile. It contributes to the tone and theme development of my poem because it is a very cheerful and positive line.

b. “Salty air like crunchy pretzels”

This is also a simile. It contributes to the tone and theme development of my poem because when people think of food, more specifically pretzels, they often think of happy thoughts.

6.) Revision

#1) The first revision I made was changing the word “flying” to the word “soaring” in line 4. I changed the word to soaring because I felt that soaring was a more advanced word and it gave more description to my poem.

#2) The second revision I made was changing the space between “Wow!” and the rest of the line. I gave the “Wow!” it’s own line because I felt that it needed more definition and more attention then what it had before.

7) My poem was mostly easy to write because I love the beach and making up positive lines about it isn’t that hard when you love it. I think the part that made it a bit difficult for me to write was the part of making the different lines of figurative language and being creative with my word choice.

8) I am satisfied with my final draft because I met all of the requirements and for the figurative language, I went over the requirements. I’m ado satisfied with it because  at the beginning, I didn’t think I was going to be able to put in any rhyme into it, but at the end, I was able to.

By Jackson Painter

My once friend, now my enemy.

I was stabbed in the back.

I was bitter and wanted revenge.

Luckily i didn’t have to obtain it myself.

One day i was driving and I saw something.

There was a crash and the people inside were dead.

At the moment i was sad and i knew it was a dismal moment.

Later on the news the names of the fallen where shown. There families had felt like their hearts had been torn out.

The names had been shown and i happier than a kid in a candy store.

The car had been my reaper, my hitman.

I had obtained my revenge in the tragic but triumfit moment.

1. I chose a emotion poem.
2. I chose this emotion because i have felt it many times.
3. The tone of my poem is grim.
4. Sometimes you should not seek revenge because karma will seek it for you.
5. “There families had felt like their hearts had been torn out.” “The car had been my reaper, my hitman.”
6. I changed sad to dismal. I changed happy to triumfit. I changed these so i had a stronger meaning and voice and vocabulary.
7. I think it was fairly easy to write this poem but it was not easy to fine tune and perfect it.
8. I am satisfied with my final draft because i think it displays the true meaning of my emotion.

By: Rachel Jones

I see students walking with their heads down,

Gray clouds above their heads while feeling a downward spiral of emotions,

Sadness, fear, and anger being just a few.

Expressions as if on death row while students plod towards the door.

Parents say an extra “I love you” before school,

Out of fear there won’t be another chance.

We have talks in school about how safe we are,

And are reassured that security measures are in place.

Everyone murmuring, not sure what to say

Because 23 times is not a coincidence,

Nor bad luck.

Twenty-three times shows that something has to change.

You think that something will change

Until ten more are dead.

Does anything change?

No.

Instead we are handed clear backpacks,

And are forced to realize,

It will be a while before color returns to our schools,

And our backpacks.

Reflection

by Aaron Weidner

What was once

A brilliant

Beautiful depot

A source of material

With extraordinary wood stacks

Which were like Gods

Many respected

And many loved

What was known as an OG place

There from the beginning

Before all else

An elder being

A living force

With all wisdom

And all knowledge

A landing spot for noobs

But at the same time

A household of glory

What was then

Is no longer

What is now a crater

A divot

The new tilted towers

A warzone

A place of destruction

A place of hop rocks

What was once an amazing depot

What is now a frightening divot

Like a force of destruction

Taking over the whole center

Of the map

We knew and loved

Out with the old and in with the new

But my friend

Dusty depot

Will always be remembered

Reflection:

1. The poem that I published is an ode.

2. I choose Dusty Depot as the subject of my ode because I feel that I can help people to remember the greatness and glory of what we no longer have.

3. The tone of my poem is nostalgic

4. The theme of my poem is that you have to appreciate what you have before it is gone.

5. One example of figurative language I had in my poem was “the new tilted towers”. The type of figurative language was a metaphor. This contributed to tone and theme development in the poem because it helps to give people a better idea of how chaotic dusty divot has become. It also helps to point out how peaceful and amazing dusty depot was before the divot took over.

Another example of figurative language I had in my poem was “like a force of destruction, taking over the whole center of the map”. The type of figurative language was a simile. This contributed to tone and theme development in the poem because it shows how devastating this catastrophe was and how big of a mess it is.

6.  One specific way that I revised this poem was that I changed “like a volcano” to “like a force of destruction”. I make this change to give a better simile that more clearly shows what happened.

Another specific way that I revised this poem was that I changed “scary” to “frightening” because frightening is a better, more intense word to use.

7. Writing this poem was actually very easy because it really just flowed onto the paper. I know a lot about fortnite and it is something that I really like, so it was very easy to write about.

8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because I feel that I revised it to my best ability and it has a lot of good metaphores and similes that help to make my poem more enjoyable and understandable.

By: Jess Nguyen

Tic tok

Tic tok

The clock counting down

I’m running out of time

It was the semifinals

So close yet so far to getting 1st place

Sweat

Coming down my face

Eyes

All on me

Pressure

Everyone putting on me

10 year old me

Having all this attention

Frustration

Is as big as the universe

Overpowering people like empires

This feeling felt interminable

Frustration cries during stressful situations

I can see the panic in its eyes

But it all come down to this

Reflection Questions:

1) I published an emotion poem

2) I chose this emotion because it’s something that I feel very often so I know this feeling very well.

3) The tone of my poem is frustrated.

4) The theme of my poem is,”Even in stressful situations, just breathe”.

5) a) “Frustration cries during stressful situations I can see the panic in its eyes”.

b) This is personification.

c) It adds a bigger impact on the poem because it gives you an insight of what the poem is about.

a) “Frustration is as big as the universe, overpowering people like empires”.

b) This is a simile.

c) It shows that the frustration is building up in a person’s body.

6) a) I changed “endless feeling” to “interminable”. I changed it because I wanted the reader to know how deep the feeling was.

b) I moved “Sweat, coming down my face” to the beginning because I wanted the reader to have an image in their head of what was happening.

7) I was fairly easy because I remember this feeling like it was yesterday.

8) I have somewhat satisfied with my final draft because I feel like I could’ve done better, but I did try my best.

By Charity Witcher

Pillow.

You keep

my head warm

you provide

a soft

cussion

beneath my

tired skull

you drown out

the

sound of

thunder,

on a

stormy night

you sheild

my face

from

the darkness,

just enough

so I still see

the moonlight

You smell

like

everything

I love

But yet

you

have

no fragrance

You greet

me

when I

awake

every morning,

like an old friend

You watch,

endless episodes of

Friends

by my side

when I should

be

sleeping

But you don’t mind

You are

my silent

best friend

I am

grateful for

your understanding

You absorb my tears

like a sponge

when I cry

I will

take you

with

me

to college, when I’m

older

to my first home, when

I’m much older

than that

Because you

where there

for me

when I

first

met you

By: Ashley Walters

A peaceful shadow

had settled over the room.

I blinked comfortably,

though unsure of why I was awake.

A whimper caused me to startle,

propping myself on my elbows.

A shadow circled by my feet.

I watched it grow closer.

Soft fur brushed my arms

and my vision was blocked by black.

I extended my hand,

not used to her affection.

I was struck suddenly

by how hot the room was.

She was panting

and nudging herself under my arms.

My eyes blinked rapidly as tears welled up.

Was this how it would end for her?

Tucked under my arm and overheated?

I pulled her closer,

shutting my eyes as I hoped for the best.

1.  I published a sensory poem.
2.  I chose this event because it was a very emotional time for me.
3.  The tone of my poem is somber.
4.  The theme of my poem is the time when I was afraid my dog was going to die.
5.  Two examples of figurative language in my poem are “soft fur” and “how hot the room was.” “Soft fur” is touch imagery, and helps the poem by showing the reader the situation. “Hot hot the room was” is also tough imagery, and helps the poem by adding an undercurrent of being uncomfortable.
6. Two ways I revised this poem is by changing “realized” to “struck” and “raised my head” to “startle.” Both of these revisions have negative connotations, and they fit better than words with neutral connotations.
7. This poem was difficult to write because it was an event that was very personal to me.
8. I am somewhat satisfied with my poem, because I like how the flow of the words works, but I do not think my word choice conveys the mood I had chosen.

By: Gaby Figueroa-Badel

1. Strolling along the boardwalk,
2. The crunch of sand bits under our shoes,
3. A strong mix of scents fill the air,
4. One of sweet fluffy clouds sold on a stick,
5. Another of the tangy salt air,
6. Both blown up in our faces,
7. Playing a game of Tug ‘o’ War on our noses,
8. Slowly parting from the sea of glowing neon lights, game music, and children yelling of joy,
9. Soon enough,
10. We’re standing right in the middle,
11. Of where two exotic elements meet each other,
12. Ginormous bubbles of the waves crashing down,
13. Onto the powdery white sand,
14. I let go of his grasp,
15. Which had held onto me like the harness of a zipline,
16. To immerse my toes into the cold mixture of the clear water and sand,
17. I look up slightly blinded,
18. By the big, bright, beaming star in the sky,
19. As it slowly reaches down lining up with the ocean,
20. Its rays bouncing up and down the water,
21. I spin my head around only to find him staring straight at me,
22. A crooked grin from ear to ear,
23. The softest eyes looking deep within my soul,
24. Beautiful lashes batting at mine,
25. I smile back,
26. Letting him know that everything happening is real,
27. And not in his head,
28. For it’s in mine,
29. And I cherish every minute of it.

1. I published a Sensory detail Poem

1. I choose this event because it was a nice memory of a dream I had, and I figured that the beach had many chances to put in sensory details.

1. I believe that the tone is empathetic.

1. Enjoying and savoring wonderful moments, are a part of life that people should hold onto and be grateful for.

1. The first example of figurative language is:
   1. “By the big, bright, beaming star in the sky,”
   2. The type of figurative language is alliteration.
   3. I believe that this line of figurative language contributes to the poem and  is a kind of reminder to the reader that everything about this poem is relaxing, and calming.

The second example of figurative language is:

1. 1. “Playing a game of Tug ‘o’ War on our noses,”
   2. The type of figurative language is personification.
   3. This type of figurative language contributes to the poem by really explaining to the reader how strong the scents are, and yet how they might be complete opposites, they are pleasant to smell.

6. The first revision I made was:

1. I changed “Sweet and fluffy clouds sold on a stick,” to “One of sweet fluffy clouds sold on a stick,”.
2. I changed this line because I felt that the reader needed to know that I was only talking about to scents in the poem, and felt that, that was the best way to differentiate them. I also took out the “and” between “sweet” and “fluffy” because I did not think that it was needed.

The second revision I made was:

1. Lines 7,8, and 9 were originally going to say “As we slowly part from the sea of, Bright, signs, game music, and people screaming, Joy after winning stuffed animals from games,”. I revised and edited those lines by typing line 8 as “Slowly parting from the sea of glowing neon lights, game music, and children yelling of joy,” and completely replacing line 9 with “Soon enough,”.
2. I edited those lines because I think the ones before them were too intense and were nowhere near the peaceful setting I wanted in my poem. I also believe that the old line of 9 did not even contribute to the main idea of the poem.

7. It was very easy to type up this poem because I already had half of the material written up, and even though I changed much of the content, I found that the words just keep flowing once you have a solid idea in mind, with many supportive details.

8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because I consider myself a good writer. Whenever I start to write about a story that I’ve had in mind for awhile, it almost always comes out the way that I thought it would. That’s exactly what happened with my piece here, so I am happy with it.