By:Jag Aceron

An elevator full of people,

but all blurred out in my eyes.

The only ones I see are my family.

A ding and the shuffle of feet.

Loud gasps go around as I follow my parents out

Hands glued together.

In my five year old eyes,

I see an entire city below me.

Fear leaks into my mind but is swept away by a tsunami of curiosity.

Waddling on short legs over to my brothers

I look down at the glass floor below me

Seemingly invisible, as if I was floating in air.

In my eyes of wonder I see..

I see shimmering buildings below smiling at me

I see the clouds sleeplessly drifting

And I see my family,

They too staring in the eyes of wonder.

1.I published my sense poem.

2.I chose this event because it was the first time seeing something that was so out of the ordinary for me.

3.Astonished

4.There is always something bigger and better to see.

5.”I see shimmering buildings below smiling at me” This is personification and it adds a sense of fiction and unrealnes to the tone.

“as if I was floating in mid air” This is a simile and also adds to the tone by making it seem like I am doing thed impossible.

6.I changed “my eyes seeing only my family” to “all blurred out in my eyes” the words blurrd puts more emphasis on my not paying attnetion to them.

I also changed “walking over to my brothers” to waddling over” because it supports that this is from the perspective of a five year old.

7.It was fairly difficult  to write because it took me time to find the write wordings.

8.Im very satisfied with my peom because it seems smooth and has lots of different hidden meanings.

By:Naeson Kathir

I unwrap the delicate wrapper

I turn the colorful rock

In my soft ,small hands

Like when you use a fidget toy

I observe the imperfections

Like a cat observing a mouse

I move the intricate candy

Toward my mouth

Like a rocket entering space

Its home

The feeling

It feels like a bright light

Shining upon me

The flavor of one

Can enlighten a person

On how delicate and complicated

A flavor can be

Like a teacher teaching student

Jolly Ranchers is hope

For a wonderful rest of your day

Like the sun rising to the dark, sleeping world

Bringing life and positivity with it.

Reflection:

1. I published a ode to Jolly Ranchers
2. I chose to do an ode to Jolly Ranchers cause I have a deep love for Jolly Ranchers and I love to eat them.
3. The tone of my ode is content.
4. The theme of my poem is that Jolly Ranchers bring enjoyable flavors and happiness to you.
5. One piece of figurative language is “Like the sun rising to the dark, sleeping world, bringing life and positivity with it”. This type of figurative language is simily. This piece of language contributes by explaining the magnitude of the feeling when you eat a Jolly Rancher . Another piece of figurative language which is a simile is ” like a rocket entering space” and this is used in the poem to make a conection between a rocket entering space and a Jolly Rancher entering your mouth
6. I changed ” like a wheel being turned” to ” like when you use a fidget toy because it makes the poem read more smoothly. Another revision I made is that I changed “intrecate” to “intricate” because it is a spelling error.
7. It was not very difficult to write this poem because I love Jolly Ranchers and it was really easy for me to talk about it.
8. I am very satisfied with my poem because it sounds like a poem writen by a professional.

By: Ian Byrd

As I stood still in the water

With the seagulls flying above

Me and my cousin feeling the touch of the sand

As we waited for the perfect wave

We also could hear the waves crashing

With the boogie boards in the palm of our hands

We see the great wave

Mount on top of our boogie boards

We start to ride the wave with adrenaline rushing in

The wave is very choopy

It’s over

I say that was tremendous

It was like riding a bull for eight seconds

Let’s do it again

Here we go

1. I published a sense poem.

2. I choose this event at the basis of my poem because I remembered there was a lot of senses in that moment.

3. The tone my poem is exhilarating

4. The theme of my poem is going for it.

5. Two examples of figurative language in my poem is ” Me and my cousin feeling the touch of the sand”. The type of figurative language is imagery. The imagery contributes to the tone and theme because it shows I am touching the sand in that moment. My second piece of figurative language is ” We also could hear the waves crashing”. This is imagery as well. It contributes to the tone and theme because it shows all of the exhilarating things as the wave crashes.

6. Two revisions I made in my poem is I changed awesome to tremendous I changed it because it is not as boring as the word awesome. Another revision I made is I changed bumpy to choopy I changed it because it is not as dull of a word as bumpy.

7. It was not difficult, but it was not hard because it took a little bit of time think of which senses to use.

8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because it has a lot of senses and lines.

Aaryan Dave

I turn on my console

The power button glittering like and emerald

It starts

A bright, shining star

Fortnite

The loading screen

Displaying the heroes

Standing tall as a skyscraper

It shows the dreaded “Loading…”

Beep, beep

We’re off

I jump

Soaring like a magnificent eagle

Soon, my glider deploys

I glide in smoothly

A professional

I see a chest

Light oozing off like lava from a volcano

I open it

Out pops a gold Scar and a Chug Jug

God has shined his light upon me

I am luckier than a 7 leaf clover

Wait,

I can hear something

Aaaaaaaaaaaa!

Another chest

Destroying walls frantically like a massive wrecking ball

I find it

Its soft glow,

A beacon of light in this dark, desolate world.

Reflection:

1. I published and ode

2. I chose Fortnite as the subject of my poem because it is something that I enjoy a lot.

3. The tone of my ode is excited.

4. The theme of my poem is that Fortnite brings enjoyable adventures to its players.

5. “Soaring like a magnificent eagle”

This figurative language is a simile and it contributes to the tone and theme by showing how the game intrigues the players.

“Destroying walls frantically like a massive wrecking ball”

This example is another simile and it contributes to the tone and theme by displaying my excitement to find the chest in the game.

6. Revision 1: Changing “Shining in all its glory” to “A shining star”

I chose to do this change because it allows the reader to envision the screen with Fortnite on it for themselves.

Revision 2: Changing “dark, desolate game” to “dark, desolate world”

I made this revision because the first phrase made the game seem scary and negative and an ode is to make the subject seem positive. The second phrase just describes the way the game is played as dark, not the game itself.

7. I found it relatively easy to write this poem because Fortnite is something that I enjoy a lot and saying positive words about it was not tough.

8. I am very content with my final draft as it went through multiple edits and revisions so that I could display my work to the best of my ability.

By: Rachel Perkins

When we were five,

We felt beautiful

Beauty was not confined

Or holding like a vice,

When we were 14, we noticed flaws

Rolls,

Stretch Marks,

Cellulite,

Beauty begins to fit us,

Into one specific mold,

Telling us everything we are not,

Not thin enough,

Not smart enough,

Not perfect enough,

When we are sixteen, we are falling

Into its hopeless void,

It’s now ingrained in us,

We are not enough,

Beauty is like broken glass,

Its sharp edges cutting us deep,

We are confused and afraid,

Once we are beautiful, we will be enough

Right?

We are no longer five,

And

 No longer do we feel beautiful

1. The type of poem I published was an “Inspired by” poem.

2. The source of my inspiration was the idea of how when we were younger we were confident in ourselves and how we looked but as we have gotten older our confidence wears away.

3. The tone of my poem is pushing back and confrontational.

4. The theme of my poem is that as you get older you lose yourself to the expectations of society.

5. “Beauty begins to fit us, into one specific mold.” This type of figurative language is personification and imagery. This figurative language contributes to the tone and theme development of this poem because it helps the reader visualize one mold proving the point that there is only one type of beauty and how it’s singular and there can’t be more than one.

6. “When we are sixteen, we are falling into its hopeless void.” This type of figurative language is imagery. This figurative language contributes to the tone and theme development of this poem because it helps the reader visualize themselves falling into a void and the hopeless void symbolizes how to be able to fit the standards of beauty is impossible and it’s not worth it to fight the fight.

Revision #1

7. I added the simile, “Beauty is like broken glass, it’s sharp edges cutting us deep” because I wanted the broken glass to symbolize how our perception of beauty is broken and because it’s broken the “edges” are hurting people who don’t fit the “mold.”

Revision #2

8. I removed the personification, “When we are sixteen it’s hissing at us” because I thought it didn’t sound right.

10. This poem was relatively easy to write because I was able to add a lot of imagery and was able to personify beauty.

11. I am satisfied with my final draft because I think that I was able to put a detailed picture into the reader’s mind and I think that the figurative language brought it more to life.

By: Gavin Byerley

Grenade Launcher,

Takes down people like John Cena,

Boom!

Bombs away like Civil War,

Domination,

Abusing defaults in Dusty Divot,

Squads

getting wiped

like a memory cartridge,

Shooting shots

in bases like Kobe,

Getting 20 kill games

just like Ninja,

Waste of

inventory space,

I think not,

Valuable like a diamond,

Need a #1 Victory Royale,

Use the

grenade launcher

Reflection

1. I published an ode as my poem.
2. I chose the grenade launcher for me subject of my ode because it is my favorite weapon in Fortnite.
3. The tone of my poem is grateful.
4. The theme of my poem is everyone has different opinions on different ideas.
5. “Valuable like a diamond” is a simile. It contributes to the tone and theme by showing that it has a spot in the game whether you like it or not. “Squads getting wiped like a memory cartridge” is a simile. It contributes to the tone and theme by showing it can do a lot of damage to players and that it’s a very good weapon.
6. The first revision is made was I changed hurting to abused because it’s a more elevated word. The second change I made was I changed killed to wiped because it makes the reader think what I’m trying to say.
7. This poem was really easy to write because once I got a subject to write about ideas came to me often.
8. I am pretty satisfied with my poem because it meets and exceeds the requirements and I spent a lot of time on this poem.