by Ryan Knight
The Rivalry
I wake up Sunday morning and I know it’s going to be a good day,
The birds are chirping, the sun is shining, and everyone is smiling on their porch,
I pull out my cold phone to make sure my fantasy football lineup is perfect,
I was as nervous about the game as someone that gets stuck on an elevator,
Before I watch any football, I have to go to church,
Church felt the most long it has ever felt but after a couple hours, I’m home,
When I get home, I make a delicious toasted, ham, and cheese sandwich,
I take a seat in my usual spot on the couch and get ready to watch some football,
I see my players start to rack up some points for my team,
My lead on Peter starts to grow and grow until it starts to look like it’s over,
When some people start to realize the upset my phone starts going “Ding!”,
Fast forward to the end of the night and I ended up beating Peter by almost 50 points,
I never slept so well that night knowing I had won the most important game of the season
- I chose a Sensory detail Poem.
- I chose a Sensory detail Poem because I think sensory detail poems are more entertaining and more enjoyable to read.
- The tone of my poem is victorious.
- The theme of my poem is even if the odds are against you, never give up.
- “I was as nervous about the game as someone that gets stuck on an elevator” This is a simile and chose this type of figurative language to explain as thoroughly as I can what I felt at the time. “The birds are chirping, the sun is shining, and everyone is smiling on their porch” This is imagery and I chose this type of figurative language so people will understand more of the vibe that Sunday morning.
- One way I revised my poem was I added “cold” to line three to activate the feel sense. Another way I revised my my poem was I added line four so I could have as much figurative language as I could.
- This poem was fairly easy to wright because I have a lot of experience in this type of writing.
- I am very satisfied with my final draft because I added four out of the five senses and I added multiple examples of figurative language.
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