By: Sami Saifudin
I was at the basketball court
Me and my teammates erging to get on the court
Us waiting felt like centuries
Finally, our time to play
My heart was wrenching faster than the speed of light
The game starts with a loud whistle
The ball bouncing and the ball going in the basket was happening so fast
When the ball came to me I made sure to not lose it
We were hitting the final minutes of the game
The game was going faster than flash
Seeing the clock move way to fast for my liking
I could smell the taste of victory
When the final whistle was finally blown
The game was finished
The court was rampaged by friends
Celebrating our victory
- I did a sensory poem.
- I picked this event because I knew if I wrote this it would be easy to write a sensory detail poem.
- The tone is anxious
- The theme is don’t let fear get in the way of succes
- ” My heart was wrenching faster than the speed of light”. This is a hyperbole and it contributes to the theme because it shows I was nervous for the game. ” The game was going faster than the flash” . This is also a hyperbole and it contributes to the theme because it shows that I was not ready because of how scared and unaware I was.
- ” When the ball came to me I made sure to not lose it”. I added this to my poem to get an extra sensory detail. I changed ” The clock was ticking to fast for my liking” to ” Seeing the clock move way to fast for my liking” . I did this because I wanted to add more sensory details to my story because that was what I was lacking.
- This poem was not too hard to write because I remember that story very well and getting the sensory details for the story were not that hard.
- I am pretty satisfied with my final draft because I made sure I had all the requirements and no grammar/ spelling errors.