Category: Business Letter

Business Letter to Nike By: Isabella DiFulvio

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One Bowerman Drive
Beaverton, OR 97005
October 25, 2015
Isabella DiFulvio
43403 Stukely Drive
Sterling, VA 20166

Dear Nike,
Nike is one of my favorite athletic clothes brands, and I have everything from your soccer cleats to your shin guards and to your running shoes. Whenever I go out shopping I always stop by your outlet store or Dick’s Sporting Goods to see if you have anything new on sale. All of your products that I’ve purchased so far are of great quality and work perfectly. I especially love your soccer cleats, sweat pants, and your running shoes.
Your Nike Rally Loose pants are comfortable, warm, and snug. I have them in black and they match with any t-shirt or sneakers. I wear them when I go to the store or to school or on any average day. The size women’s XS fits me like it was tailored just for me. The cuffed ankle and soft interior makes the pants excellent for any occasion.
I also have a pair of your Nike Free 5.0 running shoes. I got them a while ago so I’m not exactly sure about the exact model. They are fantastic, and I love how comfortable and light they feel on my feet. The molded sock liner additionally adds extra support and comfort. Also they run a little bit wider which is perfect for my foot. I have them in a neon orange color and they stand out in a crowd.
My absolute favorite product of yours so far are your Tiempo Legacy FG soccer cleats. I got them about two months ago, and they are providing me with excellent traction and comfortability. My feet are slightly wider and these cleats give me comfort that no other brand has. The forefoot stitching is almost like a cushion which allows me to have superb ball control and the Hypershield outer layer that hugs my foot grants me the ability to make crisp passes. The Tiempo Legacy FG cleat is definitely the best pair of cleats I have ever owned.
            You guys have done an exceptional job with combining comfortability, style and quality into all of your products. I wanted to write this letter to say how great this brand is and how much I love it. I hope you guys keep designing good quality and stylish products.
Thank You,
Isabella DiFulvio

Business Letter to Nintendo

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23027 Weybrigde Sq.
Ashburn, VA 20148


October 8th, 2014


4600 150th Ave NE
Redmond, WA 98052


Dear Mr.Reggie Fils-Aimé,


I recently have bought the new Wii U console and I have been immensely enjoying it. The device is great; the ability for the games to have stunning and beautiful graphic makes gameplay much better. The other features placed in it are amazing such as the dual screen, fluidness in motions, and new control possibilities with the gamepad, once again, making the gameplay great. I recently bought the game Super Smash Bros for the Wii U. This game has been awesome! I really love the features of the game and the updated graphics make the game really enjoyable to play and watch. Also, the 8-player brawl feature is an amazing feature added in. On top of that, the many new characters added in such as Lucina and Robin from the Fire Emblem Series and Shulk from the Xenoblade Chronicles series make the game have a much higher variety which, once again, makes the game very exciting. The old characters that seemed to be overpowered were also fairly debuffed and vice versa.


However, I do have a few concerns, the first being that there is no adventure mode inside this new game. Inside Super Smash Bros. Brawl there was an adventure mode called the Subspace Emissary. Throughout this, we had to stop some force from taking over the land where all the characters seem to live. This led us to the final boss, Tabu who we had to destroy in order to bring peace back to the land. My friends and I spent a countless amount of hours playing the adventure and the fact that there is no adventure mode was upsetting. When it comes to the next patch of the Super Smash Bros.4 series, please keep this in mind and make an adventure mode as exciting, if not, even more exciting than the one in Brawl.


My second concern is the lack of understanding of the controls. Before playing, I wanted to know how to do a “smash attack,” the attack that enables the user to more easily launch up the opponent into the air. I spent at least 5 minutes for searching how to do this, as this feature was described in the tutorial. I understand that there is the manual in order to do this, but reading the manual is not very exciting to do. However, I was desperate and I went through the manual. I feel the best way to integrate this lack of knowledge of controls is into an interactive tutorial rather than a quick 30 second video that does not explain the controls that well. I also later found the controls button hidden in the bottom right hand corner of the settings. Please make the controls more easily to be seen as Smash Bros. has some of the simplest controls to use compared to other fighting games but new users and people (like me) who did not even thoroughly understand the controls of the previous games will not be able to figure them out too easily.


I highly appreciate you for taking the time to read my critiques on your new game, Super Smash Bros. for Wii U. In addition, if this letter is not sent to the correct area, please forward this letter to the place it should be.


Thanks again,


Harish Karumuri


NERF Business Letter

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NERF Customer Service
1027 Newport Ave.
Pawtucket, RI 02862
Whoever It May Concern:
I very much enjoy your products. However, I have encountered a problem with your NERF Zombie Strike Crossfire Bow Toy.
When I bought this product, I was delighted.  I am a huge fan. The Crossfire Bow was perfect, the first of its kind that I am aware of, with an adequate number of darts, and a realistic string to make it look like a real crossbow. I was so pumped up because finally a real NERF crossbow had been made! However, I had two small problems, the first problem being the zombies. My family and I are not really into zombies, but this wasn’t a major problem because as soon as I pulled it out, I attached stickers to cover it up. The second problem was much more important. As soon as I loaded the gun and pulled the trigger, a bullet flew out. Perfect. But the second time I shot it, one bullet came straight and fast, like it’s supposed to, but the second bullet barely came out of the socket.
            This was very disappointing because I purchased the Rough Cut gun knowing that it shot two bullets at the same time. I didn’t really care for this feature so I bought the Crossfire Bow knowing that it didn’t shoot two bullets at the same time. If I would have known that the bow shot like this, I never would have purchased it in the first place. I tested the bow five times recently, and three times this occurred. This is very frustrating because I have had little problems with your toys, and they all work wonderfully. Now all of the sudden it is malfunctioning.
            As a dedicated consumer, I request that I will be given a free Crossfire Bow as a result of the poor quality and performance. My friends and I love playing an occasional NERF battle, and this is very disappointing.
Sincerely,
Ethan McFerren

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October 7, 2014
Starbucks Corporation
2401 Utah Ave S
Seattle, WA 98134
Dear Mr. Baldwin,
 I am writing to you about an issue that occurred while I was ordering an item off the menu at a nearby Starbucks. The problem was the price and how they made my drink. I ordered a Grande Caramel Frappuccino which is priced at $4.25, and I think it’s way too expensive.
 When I took a sip of my drink, it tasted like watery caramel and foam. I have noticed that the Caramel Frappuccino tends to separate into slush and liquid, so you should stir it a bit with the straw for a better drinking experience. I’m pretty sure that the Caramel Frappuccino are made by blending coffee with caramel sauce, milk, ice, and then topped with whipped cream. I thought that if I at least got the Grande, since I had always ordered a small, I would be provided with a better beverage, but it was a complete and utter disappointment.
It did have a stronger coffee flavor than other ones I have tasted, but not to a great extent. I really enjoy the taste of caramel and like most of the other drinks; the Caramel Frappuccino was very sweet with a strong flavor.
I appreciate that you took your time in reading my letter thoroughly and carefully. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future about my complaint. Thank you and please feel free to contact me at 703-327-8437 as soon as possible.
Sincerely,

Nasima Sadr

Business Letter

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Children’s Hospital of Pittsburgh of UPMC
One Children’s Hospital Drive
4401 Penn Avenue
Pittsburgh, PA 15224

 

Dear Children’s Hospital of Pittsburgh Organ Transplant Division:

        Over the 14 years of my life, I have lived 10 of them with a liver transplant.  The other 4 years before the transplant weren’t so great, because it was then that I was sick with Maple Syrup Urine Disease.  I have said thank you many times over the years after the transplant and took each day as a gift and a blessing.  However, I never formally thanked you all for taking my mom’s seemingly impossible request back then.  For if you hadn’t, I would not be enjoying the life I have.  I told myself that someday I would formally thank you for what you did, but I never got around to it.  I wanted to change that, so I wrote this to you in order to complete my long time goal.  My name is Jakob Stapleton Jasin, aka JJ.  I’m almost 15 and my parents are Chris and Susan Jasin, and I have a wonderful sister named Alyna, who is adopted, as well as a beautiful dog named Bella.  I just recently started my freshman year of high school, and I am already part of the school’s cross country team and have a wonderful group of friends.  So far I have straight A’s, and I’m taking all Honors classes.  I could go further with what my life is like, but the point is that all of this I just mentioned would not be possible for me if you hadn’t taken the request that my mom made for something that hadn’t been successful before: liver transplantation for a MSUD patient.  I am proud of whom I am now and will become, and I know my parents are proud of me, too.  So, thank you for saving my life.  I mean it and I owe you all so much for my gift.

Sincerely,

Jakob Jasin (JJ)

1st successful MSUD transplant recipient

Business Letter to the Georgia Institute of Technology

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October 9, 2014

Georgia Institute of Technology

North Ave.

Atlanta, Georgia 30332

Dear Georgia Institute of Technology Representative:

Approximately 14 years ago, my parents graduated from the Georgia Institute of Technology. This is why I grew up hearing about Georgia Tech my whole childhood. As a child, I grew up with a Yellow Jacket stuffed animal and learned to correct others when they called it a “bee”. I also memorized the lyrics to “I’m a Wramblin’ Wreck from Georgia Tech” fight song as an 8 year old little girl. As I grew in height, my hatred for the University of Georgia also grew. Although there were some times where I wanted to go to other schools such as the University of Virginia, Virginia Tech, or even Harvard, I always ended up settling on Georgia Tech.

I am currently a Freshman at Rock Ridge High School in Ashburn, Virginia and taking the highest level academic courses offered to me at school. As a Ninth Grader, I am taking Algebra 2/Trigonometry, Honors Biology, Spanish 3, Pre AP World History and Geography, and Honors English for my academic classes. I am also participating in Advanced Mixed Chorus, Study Hall, and Health and PE for my other blocks. As with extracurricular activities, I am on my school’s Freshman Volleyball team and in the All Female A Cappella Club. Over the summer, I took the summer school course of Earth Science because I enjoy science and want to take as many science classes as possible. This allowed me to get a headstart to my first year in high school, and the course gave me something to do over the summer. In the next three years of high school, I plan on taking the most advanced science classes, at least 2 AP social science classes out of 4 years of social science classes, and 4 years of honor level English. By the end of Senior year, I hope to have finished AP Calculus AB, AP Calculus BC, and AP Spanish.My favorite classes have always been math and science, and I believe that going to a college that will help me develop skills in my interests is the best college for me. I am also intrigued by the idea of pursuing a career in Computer Science or Computer Programming.

The purpose of this letter wasn’t just to talk about how much I love Georgia Tech but about how to get into Georgia Tech. After taking 4 years of advanced courses in every subject, I hope to be able to attend the Georgia Institute of Technology, but I have found a few obstacles blocking my path to my future at Georgia Tech. I have calculated that it will cost about $100,000-$120,000 to go to Georgia Tech for a full four years and get my Bachelor’s Degree in the study of my choice, due to living out-of-state. This is not accounting for the price of books, housing, food, and inflation. Student debt is increasing greatly and will likely continue to incresase for years to come, which worries me about my future. Either I risk going to my dream college and being in debt for a long time or I go to an in-state college for less and don’t get to go to my dream college. Even though my parents both went out-of-state to Georgia Tech, neither of them want me going to an out-of-state school and spending money we don’t have. They have agreed to pay for some of my college and possibly loan me interest-free money, but I’m still worried about my future. Yes, I can try to get scholarships and get a job, but I want to go to Georgia Tech knowing that I won’t be in debt the rest of my life. Do you have any suggestions as to what classes I should start taking, what activities I should be participating in, and ways I can accrue enough money to get through college?

Thank you for your time,
Gwyneth Schloer

Justice Letter

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Justice Store
22000 Dulles Retail Plaza
Sterling, VA 20166

Dear Justice:

A few years ago, I finally found a jumpsuit at your store that matched my style. This jumpsuit is short and has laces at the top. The style was very attractive. I was so happy that I couldn’t wait to wear it, but I saved it for a day at the beach. A day before I went to the beach, I decided to try on the jumpsuit before I packed it into my suitcase. Then, just as I gently pulled the lacing over my shoulders, one of the shoulder laces snapped!

I was devastated because I was really looking forward to wearing that jumpsuit on the beach. I hadn’t even pulled hard on the laces; I was very careful. When I looked at the wrecked lace, I realized that the problem arose due to the fault of your stitching. The laces were stitched on too loose and carelessly; by the time I put on my dress, they completely came apart! I am very disappointed in the quality of your stitching! The dress that I paid full price for didn’t even last a few seconds. It separated and now I cannot even wear it anymore before finding a way to stitch it back myself.

I do have to commend your store for its fabulous model, though. The fashionable model and the colors of the jumpsuit went together and looked adorable. I just wish I had a chance to wear these adorable clothes and show them to others before they rip apart because of the stitching issues. The quality of the clothing I received from your store is terrible; it doesn’t have any relation to the price of the jumpsuit.

I wanted to let you know that you should improve the quality of your clothing so that they can last long. I would propose taking the time to focus more of your budget on creating the clothing instead of designing it, because I feel that the designs of your clothing are already getting an abundant amount of attention. In fact, that is the best part of your clothing!

If you advertise your improved stitching quality, I am sure that many others will be interested in buying your clothes. I have a few friends who have also had similar issues about your clothing, and I believe that taking this suggestion into consideration would be really beneficial to both your store and your customers. My friends all agree that the quality of the stitching in your clothing is the only thing that keeps them from buying more clothing from your store, anymore. After all, Justice has the best designs, but just needs to have better quality to become even more successful. Thank you so much for taking the time to read this and taking my improvements into consideration!

Sincerely,

Sreya Palnati

Lifeproof Business Letter

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September 25, 2014

Brian Thomas
209 S Meldrum
Fort Collins, CO 80521 USA

 Dear Mr. Brian Thomas:

I am writing this letter to notify you that customer service has yet to address the problem I am having with my I phone 4s Life Proof case.

I am dissatisfied with the product I bought from your company. Within the first week of using my brand new case my phone was damaged due to being brought in the water one time. I had all the parts on the case and didn’t bring the case in water deeper than three feet and according to the Life Proof guarantees the phone will be protected.

I understand that the Life Proof liability does not cover any devices damaged while using the Life Proof case. Since my problem still remains unsolved, I am requesting that you fully refund me for the I phone 4s Life Proof case.

Please contact me within 5-7 business days to confirm that you will honor my request. If not I will file a complaint once more to customer service for further investigation.

Thank you for your assistance in resolving my problem. Please contact me at erinflaherty5@gmail.com if you have any questions.

Sincerely,

Erin Flaherty