Hi Everyone I have another 100 word challenge post for you guys! Today we were given a few words to use in our short story, and here they are: ” bicycle, desperate, yellow, warned, greedily.” These are the words I am going to use to make a nice short story, I hope you enjoy!
I have always been desperate for a yellow bicycle. My parents warned me about the injuries that could happen if I bought it. But I greedily decided to buy the bicycle anyway and I loved it! It was my first time having a bicycle and I got to learn how to ride it. It took a while at first, but then I finally got it. After using my bike for a while, I wanted to learn some tricks to do with my bicycle. I always see cool athletes performing tricks. So I am now determined to learn some tricks soon.
That was my 100 word challenge for January 29! I hope you enjoyed it! Comment your blog URL so I can check it out! Have a good day!
Fatima-
I’m so glad you added an introduction and conclusion to your post. I hear your “voice” both places. Your story feels like it’s true, but I’m not sure if that’s the case or if you just did a stellar job of making us believe it’s factual. Either way, thanks for walking us through a kid’s intense desire for a bike, despite parental objections. Sometimes, we have to couple patience with persistence to persuade parents. The truth is, it’s usually worry that is the roadblock, so when you can lay out all the facts, such as learning bike tricks and getting outside, parents often have a change of heart. 🙂
Thanks for writing a fun story to read.
Mrs. Rombach
Hi Fatima!
My favorite part about your short story is how realistic it felt. I remember when I was younger my parents wouldn’t let me get a skateboard. If I could have, I definitely would have done what the main character in your story did and go purchase it myself. I also thought your opening line was a great way to make people continue to read; it’s a great hook!
-Kaylee from Longwood University
Fatima,
I was worried the narrator would tackle the new tricks too soon and get injured, but instead your piece simply showed how determined the narrator was to practice and learn new things. Your piece flowed well and had some great word choices such as: injuries, performing, and determined. Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA