The Real Reality

By: Kassandra Reyes

 

I pinched and hit

But it did no good,

This is our reality

The world in which we live

 

Pain, hurt, sadness

Our reality

The skies turn as dark

As their lonely hearts

And shield the light from

Our lives

 

And our flood of tears

Hit the ground with a silent splash

To wash away the pain,

In our real reality

 

But I see the light

In the tunnel far away

If only we could get there

Someday

 

 

Reflection

  1. I published an Inspired By poem.
  2. The source of my inspiration was the poem titled Reality by Joshua Pickron. I picked this poem because I think it depicts the world in an interesting way, I also think that it is very deep and well written. I also think that this poem is a good one to respond to because people have very different views on the world and reality.
  3. The tone of my poem is distressing.
  4. The theme of my poem is the world is imperfect but can be repaired.
  5. In my poem I used a simile, “The skies turn as dark As their lonely hearts”. This helped the development of my poem by showing one of the imperfections in our reality. In my poem I used a hyperbole “, And our flood of tears”. This helped the development of my poem by showing the reader the extent of the pain in the world.
  6. I changed “no use” to “no good” at the beginning of the poem to develop a smooth transition from one line to the next. I changed “One day” to “Someday” at the end of the poem to make it stand out.
  7. This poem was relatively easy to write because of the way that Joshua Pickron wrote his poem it made it easy to relate to as if it was a conversation between poems.
  8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because I worked hard on it, and I think it conveys a strong message.