Descent of the Mind

By: Michael Corej

 

 

It’s cold, it’s dark, it’s all alone,

your mind, blank, slowly going,

it is laughing all day.

Time, taste, touch, smell, sight lost, none found.

It’s like an endless void, that you can’t escape,

leaving you the one alone.

You are lost, but not afraid, all you leave is dust and decay.

It is solitary confinement, life’s lost purpose,

but you still live on.

It makes you feel nothing at all, lost emotions, no family, no friends.

You see someone lying on a bench, peacefully.

You’ll never find peace, anymore, anywhere.

Later passing by a TV store, you see

on the news, someone has died.

That person was lying on a bench.

You wonder who, with blood on your hands.

You have been driven INSANE, far gone.

Tick, Tock, Tick,Tock.

The mouse ran up the clock.

The clock struck one,

The day was done, and you have had your fun.

 

1.I decided to publish my Emotion poem.

2.I chose the emotion of Insanity because I am able to describe this emotion better than some others that I’ve read before.

3.The tone of my poem is Insanity.

4.The theme of my poem is that Insanity can cause you to do things that you don’t want to do and feel things you don’t want to feel.

5a.”It’s like an endless void, that you can’t escape.” This type of figurative language is a simile. This figurative language contributes to the tone and theme development by leaving the reader with a sense of being lost and trapped.

5b.”It makes you feel nothing at all, lost emotions,” This type of figurative language is a sensory detail. This sensory detail contributes to the tone and theme development because it causes the reader to feel a sense of emptiness.

6a. I changed meaning to purpose because it is a more affirmative word that gets the point across in the poem.

6b. I changed there to on a bench because it gives the reader a sense of being able to look through the narrator’s eyes.

  1. It was easy to write this poem because I have gone through experiences of very temporary moments of insanity before so I know how it feels. I also found it easy to write this poem because I have done some research on what people who are insane feel in their mind.
  2. I am satisfied with my final draft because it turned out to be very descriptive of my emotion and it will give you the feeling of being in the narrator’s place and how the narrator feels.