By: Rebecca Cherian

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I noticed her leaving

knowing exactly where she’d be

I waited a few moments

and then went to see

I was right of course

as I spotted her,

Sitting under the emerald green tree

I watched as the golden sun smiled down on her,

And the bright blue sky embraced her

As the water in the lake sparkled

like the gleam in her eyes,

And the dandelions,

a glowing bed that hid all the flies

I tiptoed quietly as I approached her

Realizing how peaceful it seemed

I felt a sense of calm,

the outside world slipping from my palm

I fell into her eutopia,

A world of unimaginable serenity

She turned suddenly,

sensing my presence

But it was me who smiled and spoke first

“Hello sister”

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Reflection:

1. I chose to publish an emotion poem.
2. I liked the idea of a serene, peaceful environment and I liked how there were many different ways to describe this emotion.
3. The tone of my poem is serene. Word choices and phrases such as the lines in stanza three, express this tone.
4. The theme of this poem is that a calm environment can help you relax and forget about other problems for a bit. The last two stanzas specifically helped me identify this theme.
5. “As the water in the lake sparkled like the gleam in her eyes” is an example of a simile. This phrase can help the reader to better visualize the picture and also contributes to positive tone. “I watched as the golden sun smiled down on her” is an example of personification. This line can help the reader recognize the tone to be serene, or at least a tone close to serene.
6. I added emerald green to my description of the tree to add more sensory detail. I also changed a line in stanza three. The line used to be “And the dandelions that hid all the flies,” but I revised it to “And the dandelions, a glowing bed that hid all the flies,” making it not only more descriptive, but turning it into a metaphor as well.
7. I think writing this poem was somewhere in the middle because poetry is not something that comes easy to me, however considering that this was a free verse poem about an emotion, it wasn’t too difficult.
8. I think my poem turned out pretty neat, especially after I added more figurative language. I’m pretty satisfied with the final draft of my poem.