By Alexis Mendel

Another yelp of thunder

boomed from above

like God scolding us for being

so mischievous


The radio gurgled one song

after the other

making us scream along

to inaudible lyrics

Dancing Queen

Blared in rhythm

As the rain pitter-pattered on the windows

and danced along our skin


The world was crying

but we were laughing


Fresh rain swam through our bodies

and the wet grass tickled our feet

Water splashed our feet

drenching us with cold water


Cloudy skies hovered above

taking the spotlight away  from us

But the thunder howled cheers

And the lightning applauded  in joy


A tirade struck the joy

And the lightning licked the sky

Making us squeal,

Running towards shelter


Towels of warmth

Wrapped around us

As  an ABBA’s CD

Played their songs on replay


The tirade continued

But our smiles

Were glued onto our

Shining faces


Reflection Questions


  1. The poem type that I published was my sense poem.


     2b. I chose this event for my poem because I feel that this story shows the truth behind the quote, “Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, it’s about learning how to dance in the rain” (Vivian Greene). This event does give this quote a literal meaning, but it shows that life isn’t about all the needs you have to complete of the wants people would like for you to complete. Life is about making all the mistakes you don’t want to make and breaking all the rules that are meant to be broken, it’s about learning to dance in the rain. It can also be interpreted by it meaning to stat as yound and childish for as long as possible.


   3. The tone of my poem is childish and playful.


   4. The theme of my poem is to be young and/or childish for as long as possible.


   5a. The first type of figurative language quote is “But the thunder howled cheers, and the lightning applauded  in joy.” The second one is “But our smiles were glued onto ours shining faces.”

   5b. The first type of figurative language I used was personification because I said the thunder howled cheers and the lightning applauded in joy. The second one is a metaphor because I am saying that our smiles were stuck on our faces like glue being stuck to paper. It could also be considered a hyperbole because I am being dramatic at saying that our faces were stuck with smiles on them.

   5c. This figurative language contributes to the tone and the theme because “the thunder howled cheers” and “the lightning applauded in joy” gives a childish feeling because it seems like they are imagining it. “But our smiles were glued onto our faces” makes the poem seem playful because they are still giddy even though they had been just yelled at.


   6a. Two example of a revision I made was that I changed “yelling” into “scolding” when writing “God was scolding us for being mischievous.” The second one is that I changed “clapped’ into “applauded” for when writing “the lightning applauded in joy.”

   6b. I chose to revise those words because they emphasize on the sound that the action that happened. Instead of God just yelling at them, he scolded them for being so childlike. Instead of the lightning just clapping, it applauded the kids, almost as if it erupted in joy.


   7. When thinking of this poem, it came to mind very quickly. It wasn’t hard to think of all the sensory details or figurative language because this story means so much to me. The story is just one of the few that my cousins and I share so the meaning to me is very deep and personal.


   8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because I have worked hard to keep this memory strong and all the details make it seem like it comes to life whenever I read it. The poem seems like it happened yesterday and the music that was in this poem is all of my childhood.

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