By: Gaby Figueroa-Badel

1. Strolling along the boardwalk,
2. The crunch of sand bits under our shoes,
3. A strong mix of scents fill the air,
4. One of sweet fluffy clouds sold on a stick,
5. Another of the tangy salt air,
6. Both blown up in our faces,
7. Playing a game of Tug ‘o’ War on our noses,
8. Slowly parting from the sea of glowing neon lights, game music, and children yelling of joy,
9. Soon enough,
10. We’re standing right in the middle,
11. Of where two exotic elements meet each other,
12. Ginormous bubbles of the waves crashing down,
13. Onto the powdery white sand,
14. I let go of his grasp,
15. Which had held onto me like the harness of a zipline,
16. To immerse my toes into the cold mixture of the clear water and sand,
17. I look up slightly blinded,
18. By the big, bright, beaming star in the sky,
19. As it slowly reaches down lining up with the ocean,
20. Its rays bouncing up and down the water,
21. I spin my head around only to find him staring straight at me,
22. A crooked grin from ear to ear,
23. The softest eyes looking deep within my soul,
24. Beautiful lashes batting at mine,
25. I smile back,
26. Letting him know that everything happening is real,
27. And not in his head,
28. For it’s in mine,
29. And I cherish every minute of it.

1. I published a Sensory detail Poem

1. I choose this event because it was a nice memory of a dream I had, and I figured that the beach had many chances to put in sensory details.

1. I believe that the tone is empathetic.

1. Enjoying and savoring wonderful moments, are a part of life that people should hold onto and be grateful for.

1. The first example of figurative language is:
   1. “By the big, bright, beaming star in the sky,”
   2. The type of figurative language is alliteration.
   3. I believe that this line of figurative language contributes to the poem and  is a kind of reminder to the reader that everything about this poem is relaxing, and calming.

The second example of figurative language is:

1. 1. “Playing a game of Tug ‘o’ War on our noses,”
   2. The type of figurative language is personification.
   3. This type of figurative language contributes to the poem by really explaining to the reader how strong the scents are, and yet how they might be complete opposites, they are pleasant to smell.

6. The first revision I made was:

1. I changed “Sweet and fluffy clouds sold on a stick,” to “One of sweet fluffy clouds sold on a stick,”.
2. I changed this line because I felt that the reader needed to know that I was only talking about to scents in the poem, and felt that, that was the best way to differentiate them. I also took out the “and” between “sweet” and “fluffy” because I did not think that it was needed.

The second revision I made was:

1. Lines 7,8, and 9 were originally going to say “As we slowly part from the sea of, Bright, signs, game music, and people screaming, Joy after winning stuffed animals from games,”. I revised and edited those lines by typing line 8 as “Slowly parting from the sea of glowing neon lights, game music, and children yelling of joy,” and completely replacing line 9 with “Soon enough,”.
2. I edited those lines because I think the ones before them were too intense and were nowhere near the peaceful setting I wanted in my poem. I also believe that the old line of 9 did not even contribute to the main idea of the poem.

7. It was very easy to type up this poem because I already had half of the material written up, and even though I changed much of the content, I found that the words just keep flowing once you have a solid idea in mind, with many supportive details.

8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because I consider myself a good writer. Whenever I start to write about a story that I’ve had in mind for awhile, it almost always comes out the way that I thought it would. That’s exactly what happened with my piece here, so I am happy with it.