It is a nice sunny day
No clouds for miles around
The warm glow of the suns rays hit my skin
I loook at my friend and he smirks
A little girl skips over to us
“Can I spin?” She asks
My friend and I say no
She climes on anyway
Suddenly the wind picks up, coldness
The eight grader starts to spin the metal, screeching
My friend tries to stop him but its too late
It picks up speed and the girl slips
Her legs fly out behind her
Her fingers turn bone white as she holds on for dear life
Two fingers left
One final jerk sends her sailing
She flies through the air
A fighter jet soaring through the air
Her eyes burn into me and I see murder
Her legs flail around right before impact
Her twisted foot lands, squishing into an old ladys face
The lady topples backward and they lay still
I look at the carnage and grin
1- Which poem type did you publish?
I published a sensory detail poem.
2- Answer ONE question that goes with your poem type
Why did you choose this emotion?
I chose the two emotions peacefull and fear because they are opposite tones that would make for a good twist in the story.
3- What is the tone of your poem?
The tone of my poem is fear.
4- What is the theme of your poem?
The theme of my poem is “Do what you want in life and dont let go”
5- Choose TWO examples of figurative language in the poem.
Two examples of figurative language in my poem are “Her fingers turn bone white” and “Her eyes burn into me.” These figurative language examples help set the dark sinister mood in the poem.
6- What are two specific ways you revised this poem.
I revised this peom by changing smile to grin in the last line, I made this change to help set the final mood and leave a lasting impression.
I revised this poem by adding the metaphor of her being a fighter jet, i revised this to really give the immage of her flying through the air.
7- How easy was it to write this poem?
This poem was easy to write because it was a memory I remember fondly and I can still recall most of the details.
8- How satisfied are you with your final draft?
I am very satisfied with my final poem and I think it turned out great! It has a good mood change and hopefully leaves a lasting impression.