By Sloane Helmick

My abyss and my home
More comfortable in it now then before
I knocked on the door and I was greeted by a strong embrace
I slipped as it constricted me and pulled me deeper

It’s intentions were clear as it threw me around and took the me out of me
It had a sweet inviting scent
That turned metallic and sour when it kissed me
Like a fairy tale with an unhappy ending

I was willing to give in to it
For it had stolen my heart
It would soon steal my legs, my eyes, my senses
And eventually my mind
A slave to the familiar despondence

Cold and slow as the day moved on
My mind was floating off
“Come with me!” It said, but I was held by lead shoes
Reaching out for something that I could not grasp
I was lost in a sea of my own demeaning thoughts

I walked with chains around my wrists and ankles
I couldn’t escape from it because I got shut down when I made too much noise
“Let me free, let me free,” I cried and plead
It took me and cut me
And set me free

1. I chose to write and emotion poem.
2. I chose to write an emotion poem because it is fun to put deeper meanings in poems for me.
3. The tone of my poem is hopeless.
4. The theme of my poem is that depression is a very real and sad thing.
5. Two examples of figurative language in my poem are, “I slipped as it constricted me and pulled me deeper,” which is personification, and the second example is, “I was lost in a sea of my own demeaning thoughts,” which is a simile.
6. Two ways that I revised my poem were that I changed, “getting away,” to, “floating off,” and another way I revised my poem was that I changed, “depression,” to, “despondence,” and I changed these things because I felt that they made the poem better and added to the deeper meanings that I was trying to convey.
7. This poem was fairly easy for me to write because writing about sad emotions is very easy and enjoyable for me.
8. I am very satisfied with my poem because I think that it carries a lot of emotion and depth.