By: Ian Byrd

As I stood still in the water

With the seagulls flying above

Me and my cousin feeling the touch of the sand

As we waited for the perfect wave

We also could hear the waves crashing

With the boogie boards in the palm of our hands

We see the great wave

Mount on top of our boogie boards

We start to ride the wave with adrenaline rushing in

The wave is very choopy

It’s over

I say that was tremendous

It was like riding a bull for eight seconds

Let’s do it again

Here we go

1. I published a sense poem.

2. I choose this event at the basis of my poem because I remembered there was a lot of senses in that moment.

3. The tone my poem is exhilarating

4. The theme of my poem is going for it.

5. Two examples of figurative language in my poem is ” Me and my cousin feeling the touch of the sand”. The type of figurative language is imagery. The imagery contributes to the tone and theme because it shows I am touching the sand in that moment. My second piece of figurative language is ” We also could hear the waves crashing”. This is imagery as well. It contributes to the tone and theme because it shows all of the exhilarating things as the wave crashes.

6. Two revisions I made in my poem is I changed awesome to tremendous I changed it because it is not as boring as the word awesome. Another revision I made is I changed bumpy to choopy I changed it because it is not as dull of a word as bumpy.

7. It was not difficult, but it was not hard because it took a little bit of time think of which senses to use.

8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because it has a lot of senses and lines.