By: Shruti Adavelly

Plink! Plink! The hush drops sounded from the leak on the roof.

My grandmother knitting, waiting as time ticked by, but never speeding up.

Worry line creased her forehead, newly formed.

I sat confused waiting for the hush atmosphere to clear.

3:25, 3:26 our creaking door had not opened yet to reveal my parents that were gone.

Worried from the urgency and pain reflecting in my mother’s eyes, I sat.

As the phone blared in the tranquility,

My grandmother rushed towards the black machine.

I watched as the corners of her lips tilted up and tears started to threaten to spill.

Picking up her coat and coaxing me into a taxi she hurried me to a scruffy, white building.

It was off a road buzzing with urban life.

I walked to the doors the soft brown and reds of the autumn leaves fell.

One fell on my shoulder to be seconds later brushed of by the wind.

Entering the building the pungent scent of the sanitizer hit my nostrils, wrinkling my nose,

Following like a lost puppy I traced my grandmother into a bright room lit up my the light.

There lay my mother rested as sweat beads dripped across her forehead,

Glancing at me she commanded me fore ward.

In her arms lay a blue bundle,

A tiny, sleeping baby in the bundle with tiny gloves, tenderly covering its hands and feet.

As another leaf fell I felt the world at my feet as she whispered,

“Meet you brother.”

Reflection:

1. I published the sensory detail poem type.
2. I chose the day my brother was born as the event for the basis of my poem because it changed my life forever and added another person that I love into my life. The day introduced a person that is always there and makes me laugh always and I will always remember the day he was born so I wanted to share the event that changed my life.
3. The tone of my poem joyous.
4. The theme of my poem is the delightful impact a new life gives.
5.  “Plink! Plink! The hush drops sounded from the leak on the roof.” uses an onomatopoeia and contributes the silent atmosphere as we wait for a baby to be born in this world with anticipation. The figurative language contributes to the development of the theme in the poem. “One fell on my shoulder to be seconds later brushed of by the wind.” uses personification because wind cannot brush of leaves like a person. The figurative language contributes to the joyous tone because it show the soft, silent pleasing atmosphere of the day.
6.  I revised the words quietness into tranquility in line & because it adds more of a meaning to how I want to describe the atmosphere in the poem and creates a more specific vocabulary in the poem. I also revised the line about me tracing my grandmother into a room my adding a simile to specify and bring more meaning to the confused world I was in when following my grandmother.
7. It was easy and difficult for me to write this poem because this day was very impactful and easy to remember all the specific details about. However it was hard for me to create an exact mood of how I felt of the day and how to lead the poem into a beautiful and meaningful ending.
8. I am very satisfied with my final draft because my poem portrays all the emotion of confusion and anticipation that lead to the ending of me meeting my brother. My poem has meaningful figurative language that helps show my emotion and as well as has the perfect story composition that I was intending to display.