Artifact

Mr. Heritage was a once in a lifetime experience I will never forget. From the moment I stepped out onto that stage, my anxiety succumbed to the rush of exhilaration that ebbed and flowed through every corner of my mind. The idea of performing for the electricity within the crowd enthralled the inner performer in me. Being a stage performer, having stage anxiety isn’t something that benefits me in any way. Going on stage time and time again nervous beyond belief and always expecting the worst, held me back from the performer I’ve wanted to be. The minute I finished my performance at Mr. Heritage, I knew that I had finally conquered my own personal demon. The mental block that lived in my head had finally left, and since that moment, I’ve been able to grow as a performer, more than I ever thought I could.

12 thoughts on “Artifact”

  1. I really enjoyed reading this. I loved how you used abstract phrases with very formal words in them. The phrase: ¨my anxiety succumbed to the rush of exhilaration that ebbed and flowed through every corner of my mind¨, shows this and keeps the reader intrigued, and wanting to read more.

  2. I really enjoyed reading this. I loved how you continuously used abstract phrases throughout your post. This can be shown when you said: ¨ my anxiety succumbed to the rush of exhilaration that ebbed and flowed through every corner of my mind.¨. This intrigues the reader and keeps them wanting to read more.

  3. I remember seeing you perform that night and you killed it!! I loved the line, ” From the moment I stepped out onto that stage, my anxiety succumbed to the rush of exhilaration that ebbed and flowed through every corner of my mind. ” because it really showed how you felt, not told. Your diction was great and consistent throughout the whole post. I love how you included how you conquered your personal demon, it’s very inspiring!

  4. I can still remember the tears in everyone’s eyes when you sang on stage. Your emotion throughout the whole song radiated throughout the audience. I enjoyed how your writing was very personal because everyone can relate to the feeling of having a mental block, but not everyone can relate to moving past it. You used description words to describe the audience such as, “electricity within the crowd” which created a clear picture of the reactions throughout the auditorium. I hope to see you on stage again this year!

  5. I loved reading this! Hearing about how you overcame your anxiety and being nervous, and then being able to perform well in front of a multitude of people was very intriguing. I definitely was engaged throughout your piece of writing.

  6. I remember seeing you perform in Mr. Heritage and thinking you did an amazing job. It is always interesting to see how the other person feels in certain situations. I could never perform in front of hundreds of people, so I truly applaud you for having the courage to get up on stage and illustrate you talent for all to see. You will accomplish many things in the future and go far in your performing career.

  7. The way you showed everyone reading this how you felt is very impressive. You did not solely tell us how you enjoyed performing, you were able to show the readers all your different emotions with performing. I loved when you said: “The idea of performing for the electricity within the crowd enthralled the inner performer in me.” I never thought of it as performing for the crowd’s electricity and I thought that was a really unique way to describe it. Throughout the entire text you used many unique describing words that I feel could benefit anyones writing. Words like “enthralled” and “ebbed” make writing so much more passionate.

  8. Casey,
    Your high school artifact really impressed me. While discussing a big topic in a small space, you used a very high vocabulary level. As sitting in the audience watching, I remember being so intrigued and amazed by your singing level; I think this will be a performance I won’t forget. Have you ever thought about trying out for American Idol?

  9. Your vocabulary throughout your entire piece was exceeded anything I have read so far. The way that you reflected back, remembering what you were feeling right before you walked on stage kept me on the edge of my seat. Being a member of the SCA and having the opportunity to be at rehearsals, watching you perform, I could sense that there were nerves that had yet to be set free. Comparing your stage presence and performance from rehearsal to Mr. Heritage itself, it was a complete 180. I hope that you remember this performance as much as I do!

  10. I love how you took this artifact and revealed a perspective so different from what we could tell in the audience. Its gives the post depth to see the stark contrast from a confident performer on stage to the behind the scenes look of what you were really thinking and feeling. I think its a great choice for a memorable moment because of the story you told by showing the context, conflict, and finally resolution.

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