It was the week before my birthday, and my class was acting strange, I am starting to think they are…
“Mr.Brown!” I shouted as I walked into his aisle. He dropped a pack of balloons he had been holding and kicked it under his cart. He had a frightening look I had never seen on him before.
I was walking over when he shouted, “Okay, fine!! The class wants to throw a birthday party for you.”
I gave him a grin, a pat on the back, and said, “I know,” as I walked away with a grin.
Naomi,
Your use of dialog helped me understand the scene. Good job using the focus words to create this piece. How ironic that the narrator should come across their teacher at the party store at precisely the wrong/right time! Keep writing. Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA
Naomi-
You’re the first to receive a comment from the Team 100WC this week. Yay for you! You’re my final stop today before I head to the party store to buy balloons. Just kidding! In your story, I love the quirky interaction between the teacher and student in the party store. Usually, it’s the students who are shocked to see their teacher outside of the classroom. Here, the teacher is startled, and he acts so awkward when he’s caught buying the balloons. On the other hand, the student is smooth as silk and just laughs it off. I could see this happening actually. HA HA
Looking forward to your next post –
Mrs. Rombach